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Hikari

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PostSubject: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 5:12 pm

I'm not done with he first chapter yet but I wanted to make sure I got everything right. So tell me if I got something wrong!~

Mercutia:
 

Aiko:
 


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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 5:18 pm

All I have to say is don't use and too much, and show...don't tell.
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 5:21 pm

You don't use and too much and what?
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 5:27 pm

It gets repetitive if you say "she walked, and she ran. Then she laughed, and she talked, and she saw."
   Same goes if you "tell" the audience everything. Use vivid images, don't act as if you're telling a friend what happened, show them it. 
"He stumbled away, clutching the cloth to his mouth to keep from choking on the cloying gas." Is much more exciting than "He walked back covering his mouth because the gas was awful."
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 5:37 pm

Ah okay. Thanks!

Is that any better?
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 6:30 pm

A bit, yeah.
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 6:46 pm

Okay~ ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 9:27 pm

EPIC! :'D
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 03, 2012 9:43 pm

Thank you! ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sat Jun 09, 2012 1:02 am

I added onto the parts from last time. I have a few questions before I continue.


Mercutia:
 
On yours, why did the Vipers come and kidnap you guys? And is that how she would react?

Aiko:
 
On yours, is that how he would react?

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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sat Jun 09, 2012 7:49 am

Yep :'D
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sat Jun 09, 2012 5:33 pm

Sounds good XD That's pretty good :3
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 10, 2012 6:52 pm

Thank you~ ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 10, 2012 11:32 pm

What other characters will be included? LEHINT XD
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 10, 2012 11:41 pm

Who ever wants to be in it XD

Go here: http://entertheworldofmagic.forumotion.com/t104-fan-fic-idea if you want your charry to be in it~ ^^

(I know, its weird having an app for it but I want to make sure I get everything right for your character) :D
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PostSubject: Re: Fan-fic so far   Sun Jun 10, 2012 11:54 pm

Posted a reply XD
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